The Haunted House👻😮

 I was on my way home from school, a freaky old looking house caught my eye I decided to go and check it out, I walked up towards the door a old looking door bell sat on the door I pressed it DING DONG, the door slowly creaked open, I walked in. Icy fingers gripped my arm in the darkness, my hair stood on end, a shiver raced down my spine and a lump came to my throat. It was him, where had I seen him before he almost scared me to death. Was he going to kill me?


3 thoughts on “The Haunted House👻😮

  1. Hi Caelin, Wow! I was hooked from the start here. I really like the way this is packed with action and then the creepy atmosphere takes over and leads to fear. You have done an excellent job with this. I think the hairs on the back of my neck stood too. A good sound piece of writing, well done.

  2. Hi Caelin,
    Its really good but maybe…
    Dont use so many sizzling start ideas in one and use them spaced out and not all in togther.
    I like how you said A freaky old house caught my eye, That made it a bit more cool to read.
    Not saying it wasn’t.
    Otherwise well done

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