The Scary House πŸ§›β€β™‚οΈ

It’s 4:30 pm on a Thursday night after school. A group of friends and myself are looking for a DilapidatedΒ house that had been lost since probably the 1900’s. 85% of people in the neighborhood had been searching for the lost house for a very long time. We followed a path that was about 10 m long, then all of a sudden we disappeared into the air and ended right at the front of an old wooden door.Β 

“The door creaked open with out anything touching it, the crows started screeching, a deafening scream came from inside. What on earth was going on?Β  “And then I saw it.”Β Β 

 

3 thoughts on “The Scary House πŸ§›β€β™‚οΈ

  1. Hi Caelin
    Did you want to see it though? This is a really creepy story by the end and I think I’d rather not know what it was you saw! Good work and I like the way you disappeared in the air to arrive at the creepy old door, well done.

  2. Wow Caelin, your 100WC has a great balance between everyday situations and scary ones. You have used appropriate adjectives to build up the suspense of the house and the cliffhanger certainly leaves the reader wondering. Well done.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  3. Kia ora from New Zealand Caelin.
    I really enjoyed this story, which had a few numbers in it! That makes things interesting. Using a word like DILAPIDATED is a winner too = keep trying to use some new vocabulary every week, because that just makes your writing so much better.
    Well done – and if you get a chance can you come and visit our class blog? We would love to see you. https://rakau19.edublogs.org/
    Ms M #100WC

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